Hey guys tell me what you think.

[deanl]

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[sicFreak]

Pretty good. Two suggestions, tone down your language(or use more mild explicits) and use spell check.

[deanl]

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[andyblaa]

I really liked it. I thought it had the feel and style of Run Lola, Run (which i really liked) with the bank robbery scene. I found it really easy to visualize it all and if the rest of the film was a bit different from what you call generic crime movies i think it would be really cool.

The 360 sounds really cool also.

Good luck selling it

Andy

[This message has been edited by andyblaa (edited August 03, 2001).]

[LynkOrion]

I liked it. I liked it alot.

Did you write that in one day? Wow! Is it finished? I'd love to read the finished script.

I take it by the production values your not going to be making it on a low budget. Are you going to sell the finished script. Get in contact with me. I know people who know people, Who are looking for something just like this.

You have a style of writing that is very easy to read. Don't wory about your spelling
that can be fixed with a push of a button.

Get the script finished and get in touch.

[LynkOrion]

I liked it. I liked it alot.

Did you write that in one day? Wow! Is it finished? I'd love to read the finished script.

I take it by the production values your not going to be making it on a low budget. Are you going to sell the finished script. Get in contact with me. I know people who know people, Who are looking for something just like this.

You have a style of writing that is very easy to read. Don't wory about your spelling
that can be fixed with a push of a button.

Get the script finished and get in touch.

[filmmaker14]

that script was very cool. send me the finished draft, [email protected]

[Action2:thesequel]

TERANCE
OK everybody calm the fuck down and get your hands in the air. Just do what I say, and knowone will get hurt. James get the door.

Great script. I cant write them, i get bored and just write rough guides to the scenes (i have yet to put it into practise though... im only young... well 16..).

I picked out the above bit because he mentions his partners first name. maybe he could say:

"OK everybody calm the fuck down and get your hands in the air. Just do what I say, and knowone will get hurt. get the door"

the camera shows Terrance side on to camera and James slightly forward further back from the camera if you know what i mean, then James moves back to the door and the camera goes wherever it needs to next.

its just a thought. I cant say its bad though cause ive never made a film yet or written a full piece of script.

nice one!

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